Hollyleaf's Dash Into The Tunnels [Review]

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The Escape (chapter 1)


Hollyleaf kept going onward ignoring Jayfeather's cries to stop. Ahead of her was the entrance to the tunnels. As she sped through; memories of her, Lionblaze, Jayfeather, Heathertail, Breezepaw, and the kits flashed through her mind. Behind her the entrance collasped, trapping her inside. Waving through the darkness she soon arrived in the cave and saw the river. She was preparing to jump in when a voice behind her sounded. "Hollyleaf" the voice said. Did Jayfeather follow me in? she thought inside her head. As she turned to look to see she was throughly spooked to find a almost hairless white cat, with buldgy eyes standing behind her.
"Hollyleaf, you have chosen a path few have taken and it is hard for Starclan to judge him. I only hope that Starclan is wise. They have made mistakes before they will make mistakes in the future." the cat said.
"Are you Rock?" asked Hollyleaf her voice shaking.
"I am Rock" said the cat. Hollyleaf felt as if she was relaxing. "The warrior code is destroyed, I need to escape I can not stand it....... If I would of stayed I would have been blamed for my birth. And now Ashfurs killing. I will never go to the clans again" she said with a sigh.
"Hollyleaf, you would have never been doubted for your loyalty. But you may of had a couple hardships if you continued living with the clans. But now you have chosen your fate." Hollyleaf stared at the old cat and before she could ask anything else, black waves came crashing ove her.





To be continued...

chapter 2 is called The Judgement and will be coming soon.