Commets for Martin Opal,age 12

You do have a good imagination,but you should use it on a different kind of story because this (no offense) sucked.You also need to work on grammar and spelling.

What do you mean by grammar?

OMG!!!!! You don't know what that is D: I learned in second grade.Your teachers really do suck.My teacher said it was quotation marks,commas,periods,hypens stuff like that. :)

sorry this really isn't a comment

xD Ima make a book by an EIGHT year old cush of mah talents

You need grammar improvement. Nuff said.

Big improvements. I am a bit confused about what your last post meant, Moss...

I don't understand half the things she ever posts... .w.;;

Including the title. Why or how would anyone give comets to her story? >w<

C'mon she is just a fourth grader.I don't want to be the bad guy here but show some sympathy for her,at least she's trying.

I'm going to read it now, but I must jump to Jay's side.

He gave a honest review, and you blame it on your school. You should really take the reviews to heart instead of 'LOLOL NOOOOOOOOO!'

Anyways, for grammar I'd suggest using Microsoft Word as a proof read. You should learn from the auto correct o.e

*Reads* O__e Err...I think that the age seems young for such things. To much slang, to little spacing. The spelling and grammar need some serious f*cking work, as with your indenting and paragraphs.

That just sucked. Period. No offence, bit I wrote way better than that in 4th grade ><
Improve your grammar and spelling please. And yes, everyone has to edit their own work at school, dude. Stop complaining.

Oh, and roaches in your food? Er, that's a health hazard, and if you are not joking that needs to be dealt with immediately. I understand bad food (Alot of Elementary schools have that factory nutrient sh*t) but roaches are repulsive.

If the grammar, spelling, indenting, sensory detail, spacing, proper words, punctuation, capitlization and paragraph organization improve, then you have a half-way decent unoriginal story. I couldn't really...understand most of it. Your idea was taken oh about... 50 years ago? There has to be a twist that defines your story.

If i could like your comment, SLeepy, I would :P

And the same is true for me, your comment was beautiful :laa:

Kay guys, lay off a little, would you? Maybe her story wasn't the best, or maybe her school is bad. But still, I know she asked for comments but please just cool down a little. :P Anyways, Jay, didn't you JUST make the rule of 'No Flaming' ? :o

Personnally, I haven't read her story, so I don't know what to think of it.