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"Jordan, you need to get out there and find someone," Hallie said.
"I just don't like any of the guys at this school," I explained to her.
"Well you better find someone soon there's a dance next week and I don't wanna see you in the corner of the gym like last time," she told me.
"Well, you won't have to because I'm not going," I said.
You see Hallie has grown this obsession of finding me a boyfriend, and as you can see it hasn't been going good. But I know the right guy is out there and I can feel he'll be coming soon. Hopefully. Oh well I don't really care. It'll happen when it happens.
"Jordan!" Hallie yelled, "You have got to stop spacing out like that it creeps people out. Including me!"
"Oh I'm so sorry I just got to thinking and... I don't know." I said.
"It's fine, anyway..." but she couldn't finish because she was cut off by the warning bell.
"Gotta go I can't be late for gym again. Ms. Stowers said if I'm late for class again I'm getting a fifteen minute detention," Hallie told me.
"Okay then bye," I said.



I know it has nothing to do with the title but all that will come later!

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