my book i have been making [still making it post the rest when done post if you like it or have a question ]

CHAPTER 1
"Keep pushing your doing good Gingerstorm,"Petalheart meowed,"Your almost done." Gingerstorm pushed and one at a time a kit came out.
"Petalheart, how's Gingerstorm?"Lionstar asked as he padded into the nursery"She's started kitting and she wants you with her."Petalheart replied. Lionstar padded over to Gingerstorm and layed down next to her.
"A kit is coming!"Petalheart mewed ."It's a she cat.What will you name her?" Petalheart asked."Her name will be Flamekit."Gingerstorm mewed."It's another she cat." Petalheart mewed."Her name will be Brightkit."Gingerstorm mewed."It's a tom!" "His name will be Swiftkit."Gingerstorm mewed.''Two more are coming they are both she cats."Petalheart mewed,"The gray she cat is Dovekit and the light ginger she cat is Ivykit."meowed the queen.Gingerstorm started to lick the kits to warm them.
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"I got it ,I got the moss."Flamekit squeaked."No fair!"Ivykit cried."I'm sorry i pushed you."Brightkit meowed."it is ok ,i forgive you."ivykit mewed.






IF YOU LIKE IT I WILL POST THE REST THIS IS NOT ALL OF WHAT I HAVE ALREADY.

It's good.

thanks would u like to hear the rest

I think its okay... you can post more!

May I suggest a more diverse word choice and better grammar use? It's okay so far, albeit short.

Yeah... its really really short for a chapter!

What I would type:

"Keep pushing your doing good Gingerstorm,"Petalheart meowed nervously, "Your almost done."
Gingerstorm pushed and one at a time a kit came out.
"Petalheart, how's Gingerstorm?"Lionstar asked cautiosly as he padded into the nursery.
"She's started kitting and she wants you with her."Petalheart replied.
Lionstar strode over to Gingerstorm and lay down next to her.
"A kit is coming!"Petalheart mewed exitedly.
"It's a she cat. What will you name her?" Petalheart asked.
"Her name will be Flamekit."Gingerstorm mewed proudly.
"It's another she cat." Petalheart mewed happily.
"Her name will be Brightkit. Don't you think it fits?"Gingerstorm mewed happier.
"It's a tom!"
"Then his name will be Swiftkit."Gingerstorm mewed.
''Two more are coming they are both she cats."Petalheart mewed.
"The gray she cat is Dovekit and the light ginger she cat is Ivykit."meowed the queen.Gingerstorm started to lick the kits to warm them.
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"I got it ,I got the moss."Flamekit squeaked.
"No fair!"Ivykit cried.
"I'm sorry i pushed you."Brightkit meowed.
"It is ok , I forgive you."ivykit mewed.