Shadowkit's creation

Cat Name: Shadowkit

Tom or She-Cat: she-cat

Favorite Warriors Character(s):squrrelpaw/tawnypelt

Familiarity with the series:100% fammilier

Appearance: pale black fur blue eyes and long fur

Personality:rude,swwet,confident,self centered,echo-centric,loving and loyal

Origins:ishadowclan/thunderclan


RP Sample:Shadowkit slept in the nursery and woke up to a noise"what is that?" she got up quickly and ran to see what is that."no you cant" moonstar growls.she looked fearful"its my time to be with strclan goodbye little one" moonstar nuzzled shadowkit and left to fight.Shadowkit began to cry at the sound of fighting cats...she would soon loose her mother...soon...too soon.




wanting clan- Shadowclan

Origins is where your parents are from. :33

RP sample is like::

Ebonyroot walked into the camp. She said "Hi!" to Ghoststar. She sat down and ate a mouse.

Understand? x3

And for Familiarity with the series, just put a few books down that you've read.

*Squirrel

Add more than two senctences too.

Shadowkit sleeps in the nursery and wakes up to a noise"what is that?" she gets up and runs to see what is that."no you cant" moonstar growls.she looked fearful"its my time to be with strclan goodbye little one" moonstar nuzzles shadowkit and leaves to fight.Shadowkit began to cry at the sound of fighting cats...she would soon loose her mother...soon...too soon.

is that fine and am i approved

Use the EDIT Button on your first post. It's in the top right corner of the post.

Hm, It's a good start. :3 You'll improve in time.
Just remember to take in 3rd person.

"Shadowkit slept] in the nursery and woke up to a noise. "What is that?" she got up and ran to see what it was...."

done and plz approve it

It isn't in third person yet. ono

Everything is great. Just please try to work on your english a bit. Like, capitalizing and punctuating. Other than that, it was excellent. Though, usually Role-playing skills (Like fixing your english) Come from roleplaying itself. Also what the others said, third person, and past tense. So instead of running, ran, sleeping, slept, so on. Third person is instead of I, me, we, It would be She, He, It, They, Them, etc. Understand? :)

Other wise, you did a good job for someone my age! I'm at the top of my class in english and on the younger side of WCC.

Lovely, and I mean, lovely edit! :D You are going to be an awesome roleplayer in no time! ouo

Approved!

Good job!

Sorry to be a grammarderp, but this is a properly grammarified sample, if you need it, Shadow.

Shadowkit slept in the nursery and woke up to a noise."What is that?" she mewed, scared. She got up quickly and ran to see what it was."Oh, no you cant!" Moonstar growls. She looked rather fearful. "It's my time to be with StarClan, goodbye little one." Moonstar nuzzled Shadowkit and left to fight. Shadowkit began to cry at the sound of fighting cats...she would soon lose her mother...soon...too soon.

I don't like it. I'm not a mod or a vetinary or anything, but I think it needs more grammar put into it. I've seen lots of people writing like this:

blazepaw walked into the den hi he said and sat down next to moonpaw. hows your training going said moonpaw

No grammar! It should look like this:

Blazepaw walked into the den. "Hi," he said and sat down next to Moonpaw. "How's your training going?" asked Moonpaw.

See? Look how much nicer it is to read now I've put some grammar in! PUT SOME EFFORT IN! DON'T RUSH IT!

Hey Iceflight! Welcome to WCC! I'm really glad you could join us! :D

But there are 2 things wrong with this.. one, this topic is well over a month old so it is considered dead. Therefore any posts after that is considered spam. Please try to avoid this ^^;

and two, there are quite a few younger people who get on this site who aren't very skilled in roleplaying so they take a little patience to work with. I'm very glad that you seem to know what you're doing but please be considerate of others~ thank you :D