Ya like???

Number of posts : 5271 Age : 24

Like mah five-year old girl story?

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Thu 9 Jun 2011 - 18:23

I liked it but like everybody said before,you need to improve your grammar and spelling

Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 4:23

Just...no. No.

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Number of posts : 9353 Age : 26

....Is it just me, or is this one worse than the first one? D:

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 8:20

I think she tried to make up for her terrible english by changing it to a 5-year old's story .3.'

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 16:27

I don't understand why you don't take the advice from you're last review for your last story, Moss. .__________. You have virtually nothing done, and you use words like 'mommah'. Not cool.

And this isn't flaming, Moss shouldn't have made a review for her 'story' if she doesn't like the outcome of the comments.

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 16:54

i suck at defending people on the internet *sigh*

Number of posts : 5271 Age : 24

Dudedo you expect from a FIVE year old?The girl wrote the story.

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 17:04

its by a five year old D: i'm shocked no wonder it's worse than the first one (no offense)

Number of posts : 9353 Age : 26

Moss, we are trying to tell you that you cover up your ridiculously bad literature skills by making it from a five year old's point of view, who could still probably write a more decent story.

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Sat 11 Jun 2011 - 18:23

Took the words right out of my mouth. .w.; However, even an author writing about a baby wouldn't write with this kind of grammar, because it's the author writing, not the baby. That was an example, but it's true, Moss.

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Subject: Re: Ya like??? Mon 13 Jun 2011 - 2:25

Thank you. Jay and Deadoo said what I meant to say :D

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