Losing 5! (yes five) live's!!

Heartstar padded in the wet soil when a sharp pain went through her body she convulsed once and then everything went black.
she woke up about a day later when her body convulsed again and it went black. Once again she woke up when a sharp pain went through her and she looked up into the eyes of a dog once again everything went black. She woke up and tryed walking when another pain went through her body and she saw a twoleg pointing a cantraption at her. It went black once again and until she had lost 5 lives everything was black.

Lightiningeye was out hunting that day when she heard a small thud near Two-Leg Place,she scented the air,Two-Leg,dog,and...there was a scent she knew there but she hadn't smelled it in awhile,"Heartstar!"she screeched,she raced throught the trees,but,she was too late,the Two-Leg and its dog had left but they had left Heartstar's motionless body laying there,Lightiningeye looked away,how will the clan take the news...?she thought,she let out a sigh and grasped the former leaders scruff and dragged her back to camp...

Hazelpaw had stood and watched thedogs scruff hanginf limp in her mouth."Deadsnake's twolegs did this!".She raced to the camp the dead dog in her jaws.Oncee she got there,before Lightingeye.Hazelpaw said "Guys!Heartstar"she gasped."Back and killed 5 times by two-legs and dog!".Angrily she flung the dog.

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Ahem.
Holy Shxtfxck. o____O