A Different Kind of Request... [Reviews/Critiques]

So, guys.
Remember last summer when I announced my big project of Essentia? (except you new members, probably, since most people don't know the words in my signature are colored links...)

The request I'm looking for is something simple: I need people to read my story/plotline and point out my mistakes, such as grammar or spelling. But anyway, besides that, I need people to review the story line, critique me. What's good about the story? What's bad? Is it predictable? Cliche? Boring? Exciting? Interesting? etc.? Of course, there's six character arcs: Florauna, Adane (we couldn't decide how to pronounce her name, so we added the -e as an agreement...), Kaipo, Calypso, Rinoa, and Enver (name changed from Enver to Hikaru; upgraded from supporting character to main).

It's going to be only a prologue and 2 chapters, but each chapter has 3 sub-arcs in them. So, basically, you're reading ~7 chapters. Times that by ~6 characters. That makes it, 42 chapters. You don't have to review them all, and you can even read the character arc that's most appealing to you only. But, the more the better!

The person who manages to write a very useful review in my opinion - and the others in the group - can force me to draw them 3 art pieces. 1 Half-body, 1 Chibi (can be a couple if you want), 1 uncolored (with shading) full-body. I haven't started the story necessarily, but if you are interested, just post here. Once I give you the heads' up that you're in the competition, go ahead and PM me your Gmail so I can share it on Google Docs. You will be given permission on View-Mode only, and you'll send the critique to me via PM. Or email. Whichever you want.

This way, nobody copies your review and ruins your chances of winning, and nobody gets spoiled by just clicking on the topic. Spoiler buttons are tempting to touch, no offense to those things. So, yeah.

Thanks for reading this and hope you consider helping me~

I'm interested, I love both warriors and stories!

Mmkay, just send me a PM with your Gmail. Doesn't have to be your main one or anything. lol

I'd love to review it, without entering the competition. I don't need the art so if I "win" you can give it to the second best.

Ah, alright. The competition was more to appeal, but just to give people something for helping me. cx
I don't think I have your email, so mind PMing that to me?