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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
 
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 11:20 | |
| Cat Name: pantherkit
Tom or She-Cat: she-cat
Favorite Warriors Character(s): cinderpelt, ravenpaw, bluestar, sandstorm
Familiarity with the series: I have read all of the “warriors” books, firestars quest, 2 and a half books of the new prophecy and I also have the guide “cats of the clans”
Appearance: soft, silky black pelt with blue eyes and long whiskers
Personality: Pantherkit is an energetic and brave kit who loves to hunt and has already caught her first mouse. She is also very intelligent but lacks in concentration.
Origins: thunderclan
RP Sample : Pantherkit sneaks to the opening of the nursery. her wide eyes meet something black and white. "whats that?" , she asks a fellow kit. "a badger," he says. "they are the most terrible beasts in the forests!"
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Last edited by Panthertail on Mon 30 Jul 2012 - 15:43; edited 6 times in total |
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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 11:35 | |
| sorry i changed my username so it should be panthertails creation ______________________________________ We've all got both light and dark inside us. What matters is the part we choose to act on. That's who we really are. - sirius black :hithere:  pantherkit :D - Spoiler:
she-cat with short black hair, blue eyes and long whiskers 
...(/(_'•'_)) ...._/''**'' ....(/_)^(_) Add this to your page if you are against animal abuse |
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Sleepy
Clan/Rank : RiverClan
Number of posts : 9738
Age : 25
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 11:47 | |
| It's all good except for the half-Clan part.
I don't know if they'll let that part through ;u; ______________________________________ ‹‹ former site administrator ››
pm me |
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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 12:12 | |
| ok should i edit that? ______________________________________ We've all got both light and dark inside us. What matters is the part we choose to act on. That's who we really are. - sirius black :hithere: pantherkit :D - Spoiler:
she-cat with short black hair, blue eyes and long whiskers
...(/(_'•'_)) ...._/''**'' ....(/_)^(_) Add this to your page if you are against animal abuse |
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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 12:31 | |
| yay i found out how to edit it so it should be ok ______________________________________ We've all got both light and dark inside us. What matters is the part we choose to act on. That's who we really are. - sirius black :hithere: pantherkit :D - Spoiler:
she-cat with short black hair, blue eyes and long whiskers
...(/(_'•'_)) ...._/''**'' ....(/_)^(_) Add this to your page if you are against animal abuse |
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Splotch
Characters : Sleepycloud, Hopepaw, Lakekit
Clan/Rank : Ye Old Member-- ALL THUNDERCLAN OOPS Sleepycloud (T2), Hopepaw [App], Lake [Kit]
 
Number of posts : 3544
Gender : She/her
Age : 23
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 12:34 | |
| Please don't double post! ^.^ Thanks! Also, welcome to WCC! ______________________________________  ✲Sleepycloud✲ || ✲Hopepaw✲ || ✲Lakekit✲ |
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Sunny
Clan/Rank : RiverClan Warrior
 
Number of posts : 1492
Age : 22
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 13:28 | |
| Sorry, but is anyone going to point out the not-past-tense part? ;3; ______________________________________ Amberheart, she-cat of RiverClan (Warrior, alive)- Spoiler:
Mystic, rouge she-cat (Alive)- Spoiler:
Streamclaw, she-cat of RiverClan (not alive yet)- Spoiler:
Blue----, she-cat of RiverClan. (not alive yet)- Spoiler:
Epic Rain-made avatar - Spoiler:
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Splotch
Characters : Sleepycloud, Hopepaw, Lakekit
Clan/Rank : Ye Old Member-- ALL THUNDERCLAN OOPS Sleepycloud (T2), Hopepaw [App], Lake [Kit]
Number of posts : 3544
Gender : She/her
Age : 23
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 20:24 | |
| *derp* ______________________________________ ✲Sleepycloud✲ || ✲Hopepaw✲ || ✲Lakekit✲
Last edited by (Splotchy)~Shiningheart on Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 20:58; edited 1 time in total |
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Shadow
Former Staff
Characters : Bramblekit
Clan/Rank : Windclan kit
 
Number of posts : 6644
Age : 28
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 20:50 | |
| Wow this is a good creation! Just a few things:
1. It's basically what Sleepy said: I'm not too sure about how well the half-clan thing will go with the admins, so we shall wait for word from Jay or Rain~ although it is preferred that a cat be full-blooded [insert clan name here].
2. You're role playing sample is a little short. Would you mind possibly adding a few more details and probably making it a little more realistic? It's not that it is a bad sample or anything, but kits would not be able to hunt adders. That would end up in a very bad situation... Also, on this site, we like to role play in 3rd person (which you have done) and also in past tense... like in the second part of your sample cx Just try to be careful and not switch between present and past tense~
Oh, and welcome to WCC :D
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Splotch
Characters : Sleepycloud, Hopepaw, Lakekit
Clan/Rank : Ye Old Member-- ALL THUNDERCLAN OOPS Sleepycloud (T2), Hopepaw [App], Lake [Kit]
Number of posts : 3544
Gender : She/her
Age : 23
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 20:57 | |
| oh, that is what she meant... ono *deletes other post* YOU ALL SAW. NOTHING!*jedi mind trick* ______________________________________ ✲Sleepycloud✲ || ✲Hopepaw✲ || ✲Lakekit✲ |
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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Mon 30 Jul 2012 - 9:00 | |
| lol srry il go edit it :chuuplz: ______________________________________ We've all got both light and dark inside us. What matters is the part we choose to act on. That's who we really are. - sirius black :hithere: pantherkit :D - Spoiler:
she-cat with short black hair, blue eyes and long whiskers
...(/(_'•'_)) ...._/''**'' ....(/_)^(_) Add this to your page if you are against animal abuse |
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Rainy
Characters : Heatherpaw
 
Number of posts : 5137
Age : 27
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Mon 30 Jul 2012 - 11:14 | |
| So this is really good, and I'm going to approve it, but you still need to fix your RP sample. Past tense means it already happened. You seem to be using a mixture of future and present tense, which is somewhat confusing. Past tense is the form that Erin Hunter uses in the Warriors series. For example:
Snowkit ran through the woods. She hoped to find out where her mom went.
If it were in present tense, like you were using, it would look like this:
Snowkit runs through the woods. She is hoping to find out where her mom is.
See the difference? Just try to work on that, and I'm sure anybody you role-play with will help you out if you need it. Welcome to WCC, and enjoy! ^^
Approved! |
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Panthertail
Clan/Rank : Kit, thunderclan
Number of posts : 14
Age : 24
| | Subject: Re: panthertails creation {edited} Mon 30 Jul 2012 - 11:56 | |
| yea, weeks off of school has given me brain damage! lol jk ______________________________________ We've all got both light and dark inside us. What matters is the part we choose to act on. That's who we really are. - sirius black :hithere: pantherkit :D - Spoiler:
she-cat with short black hair, blue eyes and long whiskers
...(/(_'•'_)) ...._/''**'' ....(/_)^(_) Add this to your page if you are against animal abuse |
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